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Rate-a-Poem
09.11.02, 19:21:25
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Perhaps this has been done, I don't know. If so, I apologize for bein a metard.  If this is a stupid idea...just tell me.
I'd like to start a thread where we can get opinions on our poetry. Here's how it works: I post a poem, the next poster rates it on a scale of 1 to 5 (5 being the best, 1 being the worst) and gives any other opinions they had on it. Then, they post a poem of their own if they have one. And...you should get the idea. 
Again...if this is a stupid idea, I'll shut up and quit it, lol. But...I have a poem, so I might as well post it. Please don't be too harsh on me, hahah.
Note: I wrote this last night, when I couldn't sleep. I'm not done with it. I sorta got stuck, lol. Any ideas to help?)
Stealing away in the dark of the night
To a secret place far away from the light
Where I can reflect on the things in my life
The things that I'd rather contain
The same screaming rage that struggles to win
It eats away and consumes me within
What makes me strong will soon be my doom
And only a shell will remain
The bitter feeling of being alone
So used to the solitude I've grown
But still it causes the tears to fall
Just once I wish he'd hold me tight
The lost little girl who needs a friend
Locked in her cell's where she'll stay 'til the end
If she's exposed she'll only be hurt
No one will ever treat her right
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Last edited by Nephemera : 09.11.02 at 19:29:19.
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Wow!!!! 5!!! Wow!!!! I haven't been moved like that in along time WOW!!!!!!
Ok heres mine?
What Would Life Be Like With Out You?
As I Sit I Wonder,
What Would Life Be Like With Out You?
My Life Would Be Incomplete,
I'd Sit And Wait For A Love That Would Not Come,
I'd Waste My Days Away, Searching And Searching,
Never Finding The Love I Long For,
What Would Life Be Like With Out You?
The World Would Suck A little More,
The Days Would Be A little Grayer,
The Wind A little Less Interesting,
What Would Life Be Like With Out You?
My Life Would End!
The World Would Stop!!
Love Would Not Existed!!!
That Is What Life Would Be Like With Out You!!!! |
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4.....I liek it.........but i have no poetry..... |
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tEn tEn i dont care if the limit is 5 its tEn :> really that is a great pome and i really want to read it finished
well heres one of mine
Screams of hatred
tourdes our souls |
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| A five for both. No poetry at this time.... I have a whole disk full at home. I'll add one later. |
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Oh, snap. I'm back online.
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tEn tEn i dont care if the limit is 5 its tEn :> really that is a great pome and i really want to read it finished
well heres one of mine
Screams of hatred
tourdes our souls
inlightens even
the putridest hearts
envy of the way
the death can flee
hiding in the shadows
not knowing hes there
yet still we enter
the darkest of souls
leaving our hearts in the light
and the sound of hate and scornes behind |
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That's morbid, Twavish. O.O
I'd say a 4. I like it...but it doesn't flow very well.
I don't have anymore poems right now, lol...I guess I can work on the one I posted in the first post.
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i gave it a 4 coz im not much for morbid poems. here is my pathetic attempt at something. be gentle *runs and hides*
~Alone with mine own thoughts~
As i lay in the field
gazing upon the skies
A gentle breeze touched
my cheek. As though it where
a kiss from you
the sounds of the earth
was soothing to my
troubled soul
A simple moment
to myself
I felt at peace lying
there with my thoughts
i put away my troubles and worries
to spend my moment alone with a
memory of you |
Last edited by Gadwinus : 09.12.02 at 10:43:57.
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Ill give it a 4, it was good,I hope I dont mess up too much.
Looking into the mirror of my soul
seeing nothing but emptness
looking for a way out
finding a light of hope
I run and run into your arms |
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In the end,every heart returns to the darkness whence it came. You see,darkness is the hearts true essence.
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