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[P] Gadwinus's Poetry
09.07.02, 11:48:43
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Alright. Here are my works, I hope you all enjoy them.
~Time~
We go through life day by day
never thinking of how we effect people
but in every action someone is effected
people like you spread joy and love
you have an understanding of things
that others in this world have not
as humans we are all mortal and
our greatest enemy is time
sometimes Death finds other ways
we are all puppets in his master plan
our time on this world matters not
what matters is what we do with it
cheerish your friends and family
you never know if you'll have them tommarow
never think that you will not be missed
for somewhere someone will miss you.
God speed and farwell carbait, you will be missed
~life your own life, im liven mine~
Why must you tell me what to do,
Live your own life, Im liven mine.
Must I have your same opinions?
Why must you push them unto me?
I dont agree with the world
Why cant you understand that.
Im an individual, let me decide
my opininos arnt always right,
but at least there mine
~Distance sux~
Do not frown my love
it suits you not
when you are not around,
I am not whole.
you make me who I am
without you i'd rather die
but you are far away now
How will i go on
pictures, memories,email
these will not suffice
for i need you by my side.
~love?~
love is a complex and interesting thing
It can be both good and bad.
It will hurt if not treated right,
but can make life blissful when it is.
with the power of a storm
and the softness of a feather
without it the world would stop
~reality of love~
Why did you have to go away
I think about you everyday
life's becoming to real
I hope this shows you how i feel
I wish i had an answer why
then i wouldnt have to cry
about all the times we spent
and what i thought they really ment |
Last edited by Gadwinus : 09.07.02 at 11:53:10.
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wow, those were pretty awesome, great stuff |
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That was downright cool Gad  ....I wrote a similar one to "Time" |
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"Some things are never left finished...other times you just gotta finish them yourself"
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| Amazing poetry Gad! Keep it up! Heh...can't think of any more compliments...mind is running so s-l-o-w-l-y... |
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Here is a poem that i turned into a song for my band.
~I dont want to let you go~
The leaves are falling from the trees,
The cars, they pass me in the streets,
The clouds cover the sky,
I wish this feeling of hurt would die.
I can’t take you off my mind,
Your pictures are with me all the time,
I can’t shake the pain that I feel,
I can’t figure out how I can deal.
You’re so beautiful, you’re so wonderful,
And you used to be mine,
Now you’re gone, left me to carry on,
And I sit here, tears build up in my eyes.
The weather just feels so cold,
I just wish that you didn’t have to go,
The weather changed into rain,
All these memories burn in my brain.
We took a walk along the water,
You told me about how I would be the father,
We jumped in puddles as it poured,
I just can’t stop from feeling so hurt.
Now it is time, to leave it all behind,
I just don’t want to let go,
I wish you were mine, just like old times,
But I forgot to let you know… |
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| You have typo errors, my dear Gadwinus.... A bad reflection on the rest of us. Nonetheless, the piece "Distance sux".... oh, how I understand it. |
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Hi.
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| I know i have typo errors. I dont really check them on word. I use notepad most of the time, and i write so fast i dont have time to think about spelling coz i want to get out my thoughts and emotions. What did you mean when you said "A bad reflection on the rest of us"? i didnt get that part. |
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| Just a prejudice I have against the lack of punctuation and bad spelling. ^_^ It makes the piece look sloppy. But then again, I moved up from quick, emotional writing to carefully crafting. Writing is actually quite hard for me now because of these new standards. =) |
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| indeed, I used to be like that. but i decided that putting emotion and feeling into your poem is more important then making sure its gramatically correct or the spelling is correct. The way i think of it is that what i write is exactly what i am thinking when i write it. |
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There's a way to do both - that's what I'm striving to attain.
Meh, I'll post a thread new with my stuff to show ya. =) |
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