Well this is not a fan fic really, just a well...my anime story...hope you like it!
Episode 1: The Planet in the Far Place
Chapter 1: Sorea and Rure
"Reality has its own limits, but imagination is bountless. This story that came from my imagination is rather stupid or wonderful." an old man, with eye glasses and a robe said. He sits on a black wooden chair with people in his front, listening attentively. His stylish hair is brown and his robe is darker than his hair. "It was dark times, when your great, great grandparents are still teenagers...[the story begins here...]
The story started when two elements, light and darkness are fighting over a mysterious planet named Metalezarium, which they found in a far away place. Folks said, that their names are "Sorea and Rure". Sorea is from the light and Rure is from darkness. In this planet, humans and monsters live peacefully. Until one time, a monster attacked 11 humans with its fangs and claws. Guess what happened to that monster. Rure controled the monster and warned Sorea that he'll kill all humans living in there so no one will believe her and she will be gone forever so Rure will rule Metalezarium with evil lurking everywhere. So the planet became dreadful and some places are with few people cause of the attacks of the monsters! Then the people asked help to Sorea. Sorea provided them shelter, she also gave them strenght to stand up against their enemies. Then when humans are being bothered by monsters, they are using their strenght for protecting their selves. But it's not enough. Later then, Sorea got mad, she created 8 legendary creatures that will defeat Rure. But Rure will kill these legendary creatures so Sorea sealed and hid them to different parts and created a right summoner who has Solex. I want to remind you that Sorea's just a spirit and can't let the creatures to follow her. She is inside Solex, a power of the light which she seals inside the summoner. This person, will sure be haunted by Rure's monsters and Rure himself. If the Solex is awakened inside this human, Sorea, who is locked inside, hiding will be freed. She will let the person to unlock all the creatures that she hid. Then-"
"But sir, who is that person?" the story was cut when a little wee boy asked. "Well, well mr. little boy...good question-ahem-b-but let me finish first, then I'll tell you who is that person, but my story might take long!" the old man said. "Nah! It's okay sir-right guys?" the little boy said. The people agreed on this one. "AHEM!" the old man said. Then he continues with his story...
"Rure continues to lurk inside Metalezarium searching for Sorea's Solex and the eight legendary creatures who'll destroy him later on...the family Sorea chosed is the Maelsaeran Family cause they always believed in her. Then, one time-here's the answer of your question boy...a little girl, was born. She has a golden hair, white skin, orange eyes and a lovely face indeed. Her name is Lucia Etoile Maelsaeran. She is to be called a dem fine woman.
Years passed, when the girl turned 16 and have her party at her house. She is a princess actually, and she's the youngest child of Merbea the queen and Ronunel the king of Elexarium, a country. Etoile's brother, Soreanei is a kind and loving brother. There are only two children. Soreanei is four years older than Etoile. All the people are invited. Even from different countries.
Meanwhile, a sixteen-year-old boy, whose father is living in the palace of Elexarium, was invited by his father to come. He came from Jellinastiques, a far away place from Elexarium. The boy arrived a day before the party. He has no idea what would be the looks of the princess.
"But father, what am I goin' to do here?" the boy asked. "Since you're the only one who's living in our town, it's better to live here. And I tell you-there are lots of beautiful maidens here!" "What did you say? Why didn't you say so?" the boy exclaimed. "Hehehahaha! That's my boy! So-will you study and live here?" his father asked. "Well, my studies and my work back there are all done...so, ah nevermind! So father, what's the...you know..." "What?" his father drinked coffee, in a yellow mug. "What would be the-face of the princess?" "PWAH! (Cough! Cough!) why did you ask?" "nevermind..." the boy's face is filled with coffee. The father blew it all in his face. The father thought that if he knew his son will like the princess, her boyfriend might kill his son. "Another question-" the boy wiped the coffee in his face with a hanky. "-what's her name?" the boy asked. "Kirean, Kirean...my boy-she's...she's...(ulp!)" "She's what?" Kirean the boy asked. "She's...ugly! A really ugly girl!" "What!?" the father of Kirean was sure that his two fingers were crossed when he said this. "Really? Then why did you sent me here?" "Because I want you to live here so you'll get a better life! And I miss you!" "Oh really? 'Kay fine...I'll study here-and I'll go with you tomorrow...in that ugly princess thingy-thingy!" Kirean said. "O-kay-(ulp! I hope he doesn't see her!)" "And maybe I can find my soulmate!" Kirean went upstairs, carrying his black luggage bag. "My boy's a perverted womanizer...sigh." Kirean's father said as he drinks his coffee again.
Not bad, I enjoyed the uniquesness of the story and its settings... This was, however, fairly hard to read. If you want to make it more readable, separate the speech from the description.
e.g.
"What do you mean, a boiled egg?" he asked quizzically.
"I mean exactly what i said" the man said.
He surveyed his surroundings, absorbing them so as to better understand the environment of this strange land into which he had been propelled.
... this is just my prefered writing style, and as such, is the one i find easiest to read. Im only suggesting, though, so do what looks right to you.
... I shall probably find that you do space it out, but only did that to conserve space... If that is the case, then I will end by saying that it was very good, and dont forget to update it!
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