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[p] First poem. LG
02.11.03, 05:35:19
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This is a very short poem that i wrote in about five minitues. It is the first poem i have ever written out of my own accord and i would appreciate if you could judge and criticize thank you. I know the endding is weak by the way.
The Light
Warped minds are gold mines for sinners and preachers alike,
who prey on the weak and those desperate to belive that they are not responsible for the things they have done,
the people they have killed, the women they have raped, the childeren they have abused and the things they have took. But in the light of judgement and the judgement of life not even religion can save you, no God can help you and no amount of money, pride or hope can save you from your own soul, your own tourment the feeling you get when you look into there eyes and all light dies.
Be as harsh as you like. |
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And you've been so busy lately that you haven't found the time
To open up your mind
And watch the world spinning gently out of time
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